Human - Gwynifer Exempt

Human - Gwynifer Exempt
Discussion in 'Creation' started by Gwynifer Exempt, May 4, 2018.
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  1. Character

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    Gwynifer Exempt

    Race: Human
    Age:14
    Sex: Male

    Sexuality:Straight
    Relationship:Single

    Height: 5'1"
    Build: Slim, and Lanky

    Player

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    Lizbeth Silverheart

    Nationality: British
    Age: 14
    Sex: Female

    Sexuality: Homosexual
    Relationship: Single

    Height: 4'8"
    Build: Short, slightly overweight,



    Personality

    There is no different from each other, Liz thinking she'd be a better boy than a girl anyways, seeing how it works out. They are both very cheerful, and optimistic, finding every place they can to express their opinion. When in crowds, however, they get painfully shy, not wanting to interrupt anyone, attempting to be as nice to people as possible. She seems very innocent, being nearly pure, but not quite.

    Positive: Cheerful, Optimistic, Commonly happy, Excitable
    Negative: Shy, Hidden, Weak mentally,


    Biography

    After having a relatively bad home life, little Lizbeth, currently named "Girl" by her parents, was beaten almost daily. The parents had exerted themselves too much over 13 children, Lizbeth being the last, and eventually one of Liz's friends at school had called child-care about what had been happening when Lizbeth finally told them. Her parents had been prosecuted for child abuse, and taken to jail, her and her siblings getting put into Foster Care.

    After being put into Foster care, Lizbeth started getting bullied in school for having no parents, and has had many foster parents, most of which simply didn't like her because of how shy she was around them, and brought her back after not a week, every single one taking one of her siblings instead. Her siblings slowly disappeared, her siblings being the only people who ever cared about her she thought, and after everything had gone wrong, a small miracle happened.

    After a solid 4 extra years of sadness, bullying, and loss, another family found Lizbeth. This time though, instead of casting her out, they simply brought her in more, as they both understood her. Both of her parents were also foster children when they were young, and they knew many friends who were shy and lonely, so instead of getting mad when Lizbeth hid in the corner, they just sat there with her, talking to her. Lizbeth had eventually grown to like and trust them, forming a very nice bond with them, even loving them.

    After another year, when she was home-schooled, she found a thing through a friend she had made at foster-care called 'Terrasphere'. She decided to check it out, and check it out she did, finding out she really wanted it, starting to love it without even playing it. She asked her parents for it, and on her birthday a day after asking, she received the Terrasphere game.


    Out of Character

    Played by: @Kublai
    Player tag: @Gwynifer Exempt

    (Ava's Demon) Ava Ire
    (Original) Original Content

    Mastery: Beast Taming, Pyromancy, Geomancy
    Vocations: Husbandry, Magecrafting

     
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  2. Human Resources

    Human Resources

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    Hey there, @Kublai! I'll be taking a look at your application today! There seems to be a few issues that need fixing, so please mend and edit the following:
    • It would appear that you didn't post your application using the correct account. I have fixed this for you, but please make sure you follow our guide next time!
    • I'm not sure if this is an error but your character's faceclaim is of a girl despite the fact that your character is male. If this isn't a mistake, please disregard this message!
    • It looks like you broke the template just bit in your character panel. Please make sure that you enter your information in the right places. You can edit your template as many times as you need.
    • I think your personality section may need a bit of work. Some of your sentences are questionable, and you also seem to switch between "they" and "her". Since it's the same person, I suggest sticking to one or the other. Furthermore, it seems a bit contradictory for her to be outspoken about her opinions but shy around people.
    • Your biography section could also use a tiny bit more effort put into it! Some sentences are worded rather strangely and you capitalize some words that don't really require it. Please give it another look, okay?
    In conclusion, your character seems fine - if only a bit Mary Sue-ish. But I'm positive that you can have fun with her here! Please leave a reply here when you have fixed the above issues.